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Wednesday, July 6, 2011

June Blog Chain - Description

This post is part of the June 2011 Blog Chain at Absolute Write. This month’s challenge is a simple descriptive setting.

Here is my piece of descriptive writing from a novel which is on submission.

Alexis hated how her father always picked the cards she was dealt. She hated the way the Moscow streets smelt, and the way she could barely say a word in Russian when all eyes were on her. Inhaling, she stepped forward and pressed her hands deeper into the pockets of her parka. The warmth comforted like her mother once had in the chill of the night.

The soil below her boots was moist, the kind of moist that seeped into small puddles and sogged into the leather, making her shiver. She looked up at the moon. It looked too much like the same moon that she saw from her balcony in California, it was the same moon, yet it felt as if she was in a different world. A world she didn’t belong in. A branch cracked and she spun around, darting behind a prickly rose bush for cover. If her father would see her out at night he would…She froze.

The figure that came into the garden stomped over the flower beds with his boots and retrieved a tiny carton, probably a cigarette pack. Alexis kept completely still as tiny vapors of the evening mist condensed on her brow.

Check out this month’s other bloggers, all of whom have posted or will post their own responses:

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juniper -
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jkellerford -
Ralph Pines -
AuburnAssassin -
pezie -
Inkstrokes -
WildScribe -
Guardian -
Lyra Jean -
egoodlett -
cwachob -
Aheïla -
faerydancer -
TheMindKiller -
Irissel -

Contest post coming up tomorrow!!!


  1. I can perfectly picture the cold, damp alieness of this scene.

    Nicely done.